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CHAPTER EIGHT

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CHAPTER NINE

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CHAPTER TEN


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CHAPTER ELEVEN

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CHAPTER TWELVE

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CHAPTER THIRTEEN

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Post by Scarlett January 7th 2012, 20:24

I thought I already said who it was and Iceclaw told me I was right? xD
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Post by Auburnflare January 8th 2012, 16:29

Add me to the Fan List please! Stupid Dark Forest Cats!!! -.-
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Post by Mossfoot January 8th 2012, 16:53

Agreed fang.Agreed.I just want to hit them.Not really!!
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Post by Frost January 8th 2012, 17:15

Haha Fang, you're added! Dark Forest cats are really bad! :<
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Post by Auburnflare January 8th 2012, 17:16

Just kidding, I LOVE the Dark Forest cats! Except Tigerstar. -.-
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Post by Frost January 8th 2012, 17:20

Haha I like Hollowflight and Ivypool. EPIC. xD Hawkfrost too (at times) Razz
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Post by Auburnflare January 8th 2012, 18:51

Poor Grace! I feel so bad for her! Sad
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Post by Frost January 8th 2012, 18:58

I like Grace a lot! The more I write~ She's probably my favourite character! Gale too Very Happy
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Post by Auburnflare January 8th 2012, 19:11

Me too! My favorite is Grace and Gale... And Coldfang! [Shuriken] XD
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Post by Scarlett January 8th 2012, 19:20

Lol if you read the books you know theres nothing to feel bad for. She's still alive so thats a miracle in itself.
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Post by Auburnflare January 8th 2012, 19:29

I guess you`re right. But she`s so tiny!
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Post by Scarlett January 8th 2012, 19:33

So was rue in the actual hunger games series. She was sent in at 12 years old.
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Post by Auburnflare January 8th 2012, 19:47

I don`t understand the real books, 'cause I`ve never really heard of them until now.
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Post by Frost January 9th 2012, 20:44

Well my favourite character in the REAL book itself was Rue. She's rather independent and resourceful. Grace has a little of her personality but she acts on her instincts Smile

She's pretty clever too. I don't really plan to kill her off that quickly.
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Post by Auburnflare January 9th 2012, 20:48

What? She died?! Oh, I thought you said "I didn`t plan to kill her off so quickly." and I was like "What?!"... Lol, I`m so stupid sometimes... Very Happy
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Post by Frost January 9th 2012, 21:32

Hahaha Very Happy I'm not killing her yet! xD She's still alive!
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Post by Auburnflare January 9th 2012, 21:42

Just asking, can you tell me what stores sell the Hunger Games? I`ll probably like Rue.
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Post by Frost January 10th 2012, 04:29

Haha Fang, I'm not sure about that. It differs between countries. Maybe a bookstore? Razz Rue's AWESOME!!
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Post by Scarlett January 10th 2012, 07:09

Any book store or general store. Borders, barnes and noble, target, walmart, etc. im sure there are others but those are the 4 primary. I suggest target or maybe walmart. You will get the bst deal there.
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Post by Frost January 13th 2012, 07:44

Yeah. There's Borders in my country but I've never heard of the others Razz We have Popular, Times, Harris, Prologue etc.

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Post by Stareye January 13th 2012, 16:44

This is pretty good! May I make a few suggestions though....
1. Just because it's based on The Hunger Games doesn't mean it has to be exactly like it! I've noticed you've copied a few scenes from the books, like Flameflicker volunteering for her sister's place (Katniss and Prim!) and Flameflicker thinking of Grace being similar to her sister. There were some other things I noticed as well, so I think you should focus less on re-inventing the story of The Hunger Games and more on starting with the premis of the trilogy and re-inventing a whole new story with a warriors twist!
2. Try focusing on a few characters, not nearly every tribute. I feel this will make the readers more connected to the main characters and will feel the suspence a lot stronger when their in trouble.
3. Introduce new twists slowly. Like when Coldfang told Scorchfur that Shadowseer was his sister right before he killed him. (Don't mean to be rude, but come on, has anyone missed it?) I feel that scene would have had a much bigger effect if we knew Scorchfur, Shadowseer and Coldfang all a bit more and it was given some subtle hints in the beggining. Also, I think giving Scorchfur or Shadowseer one more point of view before Shadowseer's murder would have truly captured the betrayal Shadowseer probably felt.
4. Give Coldfang a point of view! I think he's a really intresting character and since he's obviously the mysterious murderer, I think it would be facisnating to see inside his mind. But since your the author, if you think it's best to keep him in the shadows, that's fine with me.

On another note, you killed Honeypaw and Shadowseer. I won't forgive you for this. Evil or Very Mad ( Just joking! Razz But I am still mad. )
Keep up the great work!
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Post by Honeystar January 13th 2012, 16:46

Wait...I'm dead now? Haven't read the updates in a while now. -goes to look at the new chapters-
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Post by Guest January 13th 2012, 17:46

I can't wait for chapter eleven!!! What will happen to Grace?? XD
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Post by Lilacstar January 13th 2012, 19:00

Grace is my kit! O.o But Its great so far Iceclaw! Keep going!!! Smile
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Post by Frost January 13th 2012, 20:14

Thanks for all the reviews! I'll try my best to improve my story! Might do a little edits here and there Smile

Stareye wrote:This is pretty good! May I make a few suggestions though....
1. Just because it's based on The Hunger Games doesn't mean it has to be exactly like it! I've noticed you've copied a few scenes from the books, like Flameflicker volunteering for her sister's place (Katniss and Prim!) and Flameflicker thinking of Grace being similar to her sister. There were some other things I noticed as well, so I think you should focus less on re-inventing the story of The Hunger Games and more on starting with the premis of the trilogy and re-inventing a whole new story with a warriors twist!

2. Try focusing on a few characters, not nearly every tribute. I feel this will make the readers more connected to the main characters and will feel the suspence a lot stronger when their in trouble.


Thanks :3 Yepp I know! Some members say I should add a little bit of scene from the Hunger Games that's why I decided to start of with that. I'll try to be more original and creative for my coming chapters! When I started writing, I actually was thinking of writing from all their different point of views. But I actually mainly focus on a few. For example, Grace. She's a great character and I always enjoy writing from her point of view. I'll take note of that.


Stareye wrote:3. Introduce new twists slowly. Like when Coldfang told Scorchfur that Shadowseer was his sister right before he killed him. (Don't mean to be rude, but come on, has anyone missed it?) I feel that scene would have had a much bigger effect if we knew Scorchfur, Shadowseer and Coldfang all a bit more and it was given some subtle hints in the beggining. Also, I think giving Scorchfur or Shadowseer one more point of view before Shadowseer's murder would have truly captured the betrayal Shadowseer probably felt.
4. Give Coldfang a point of view! I think he's a really intresting character and since he's obviously the mysterious murderer, I think it would be facisnating to see inside his mind. But since your the author, if you think it's best to keep him in the shadows, that's fine with me.

Its Scorchscar Razz Hmm... I might go back and perhaps add a chapter in it? Maybe. That's actually a good idea. Hehe Coldfang? He's interesting, yep I must admit. He actually has a very dark past. I'll definitely bring that out when its near the end (hopefully not too soon because it'll spoil the surprises!)


And.... LOL. Did you like Honeypaw and Shadowseer THAT much? O.o
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