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*TRIBUTES that are dead have been removed from the poll.

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I've added some of you in my allegiances! Wink Forgive me if I changed your gender, descriptions and personalities! Cat Smile

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CHAPTER THREE

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CHAPTER FOUR

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CHAPTER FIVE

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CHAPTER SIX

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CHAPTER SEVEN

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CHAPTER EIGHT

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CHAPTER NINE

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CHAPTER TEN


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CHAPTER ELEVEN

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CHAPTER TWELVE

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CHAPTER THIRTEEN

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Post by Scarlett December 27th 2011, 21:46

Shuriken no doubt. XD
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Post by Guest December 27th 2011, 21:59

I think it's Stormclaw.
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Post by Frost December 27th 2011, 22:02

Lily's right! Its Coldfang, also known as Shuriken! Bad kitty! Bite


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Post by Scarlett December 28th 2011, 19:16

Haha bad kitty? Who are you talking to?
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Post by Frost December 28th 2011, 20:17

Haha bad kitty as in Coldfang (Shuriken), going around killing people xDDDD

No offence to the real Shuriken!
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Post by Scarlett December 28th 2011, 20:21

The real Shuriken isn't that bad. xD Only his Attack Power is scary.
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Post by Frost December 28th 2011, 20:31

Hahahaha but we can beat him! Hmph! Razz
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Post by Guest December 28th 2011, 22:12

Seriously? I thought it was Stormclaw since he is a grey tom with green eyes.

Shuriken isn't that bad...is he? o_O
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Post by Frost December 28th 2011, 22:47

He's nice as a WCF member Smile
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Post by Caraway December 29th 2011, 14:02

his brother Pain is the one to be scary. he's pretty creepy and stalker-ish in RPGs. ^^

your story is a pretty cool adaptation from the Hunger Games. i've never read the series, only watched the trailer. not planning to read it though, so i guess it's okay.
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Post by Nightfrost December 29th 2011, 14:40

AH! i just read the story!! IT'S SO GOOD!!!!!!!!! ahhhhh!!!!!! Sorry to disrupt your conversation, but it's really good!!! good job, Iceclaw!!! Very Happy Love it... its a lot like the real Hunger Games.... Razz Nice!!! Smile
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Post by Frost December 29th 2011, 21:29

THANKS CHEESESTAR AND NIGHTFROST!!!!!!! I'm glad you enjoyed it!~ If you'd like to be on my fan list, do say it! Very Happy


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Post by Guest December 29th 2011, 21:51

Great job! But it's not really one of my favourite chapters. Razz (Sorry. No )
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Post by Frost December 29th 2011, 21:57

I know! I like Chapter Four a lot! Chapter Five too! Very Happy
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Post by Guest December 29th 2011, 22:08

I like chapter 6 a lot! Super Happy
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Post by Frost December 29th 2011, 22:09

Hehehe glad you do! Smile
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Post by Scarlett December 29th 2011, 22:18

I like it a lot. Very nicely done. I like that you are starting to take my advice about the dialogue. It is much more organized this way and it is a very clean read. I also really enjoyed that you are starting to see more of the character's affairs between one another. The formalities and conflicts of the characters between others and thier own moral conflicts themselves were very well balanced, and I loved that you are now really starting to see the insecurities of each individual in the story. That was all very well done.

I'm noticing that you are still having a bit of trouble with the details and actions though. The beginning was fantastic about the details of the surrounding and the what was taking place, but when you get to the dialogue you focused a little too stiffly on their words. I suggest adding a bit more of each characters actions and thoughts of what the other is saying. It would definitely help to create a better wholistic balance. EMOTIONS! That is also very important. It was in this chapter a bit but it seemed a bit spotty. Sometimes you described what a cat was feeling but there were some parts that you didn't and I feel if you had it would definitely evoke a much more powerful response from your audience.

You're use of language it getting much better. It is generally very active which is perfect for this style as it makes for an interesting read. However, there are a few times where your more passive language creeps into your writing. I'm impressed with your use of vocabulary and how much it has improved. I would like to see more phrases like "cheerful disposition" and "oblivious to her presence" used in your writing. It is very active language and it also show's your very storng command for language and vocabulary. Very nicely done. Wink
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Post by Nyx December 29th 2011, 22:50

I like chapter nine! ^.^ The killer knows Brightpaw! o.O
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Post by Icestar December 29th 2011, 23:08

Hmm..I wonder who the killer is. I think it's Stormclaw or Coldfang Razz Anyways great work on chapter nine! Each chapter just keeps getting more dramatic Very Happy
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Post by Mossfoot January 7th 2012, 12:38

Can I be a fan?
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Post by Guest January 7th 2012, 14:21

I`m a fan! I haven`t finished reading it, though. But it`s good so far!
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Post by Guest January 7th 2012, 14:39

Ooh la la! I can't wait for more!! Smile
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Post by Frost January 7th 2012, 19:19

Tigerspirit and Mossfoot added under Fan List! Very Happy Thanks to everyone who likes it~ Hehe I've been busy nowadays so Chapter Ten will take awhile Razz
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Post by Nyx January 7th 2012, 19:48

I bet the killer is shuriken! Orwas his name Coldfnag..? Ah well. Its really good Iceclaw. :]
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Post by Frost January 7th 2012, 19:54

It IS Shuriken but his warrior name is Coldfang Razz Hahas thanks~
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