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Phantom
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Name: Phantom
Status:Deceased
Age: 27 moons
Rank: RiverClan Warrior, former; IceClan Warrior, former; Dark Forest Leader, former
Mentor:Shimmerfur (RiverClan), Silverhawk (Dark Forest), Fallendust (Dark Forest)
Apprentice: N/A
Well-Known Kin: Bluestar, Oakheart, Mistystar, Stonefur and whoever are their descendants
Weaknessess: Being small in size, she relies more on her agility than her strength. Not very used to climbing trees but prefers jumping. Hates showing weakness before others. She is easily influenced by her emotions, which is her greatest flaw.
Special Traits: Good at camouflaging and is extremely hard to spot unless you look for her very closely. Ability to swim well. A fast runner. Agile and nimble. She excels in stealth and is good at blending herself with the shadows.
Family: Whiteshadow (Father), Hunter (Mother), Rogue (Sister), Coldfur (Brother), Aere (Adopted Sister)
Personality: Mysterious and unnerving. Hardly anyone knows much about her because of her lack of presence... She used to be a stubborn kitten, full of confidence. However her personality changed as she grew older. Her close friends thinks of her as a mischievous she-cat who was always up to no good. She enjoys company and is always looking forward to adventures.
Description: Blue-silver she-cat with a white-tipped tail and cold blue eyes which were inherited from her mother. She has a long tail, pale underbelly and a lean figure. Her claws are very long with incredibly sharp edges.
History:
More about Phantom's Family
Other Cats
Special thanks to the members of WCF whom I referred to their characters sheets
Name: Phantom
Status:Deceased
Age: 27 moons
Rank: RiverClan Warrior, former; IceClan Warrior, former; Dark Forest Leader, former
Mentor:
Apprentice: N/A
Well-Known Kin: Bluestar, Oakheart, Mistystar, Stonefur and whoever are their descendants
Weaknessess: Being small in size, she relies more on her agility than her strength. Not very used to climbing trees but prefers jumping. Hates showing weakness before others. She is easily influenced by her emotions, which is her greatest flaw.
Special Traits: Good at camouflaging and is extremely hard to spot unless you look for her very closely. Ability to swim well. A fast runner. Agile and nimble. She excels in stealth and is good at blending herself with the shadows.
Family: Whiteshadow (Father), Hunter (Mother), Rogue (Sister), Coldfur (Brother), Aere (Adopted Sister)
Personality: Mysterious and unnerving. Hardly anyone knows much about her because of her lack of presence... She used to be a stubborn kitten, full of confidence. However her personality changed as she grew older. Her close friends thinks of her as a mischievous she-cat who was always up to no good. She enjoys company and is always looking forward to adventures.
Description: Blue-silver she-cat with a white-tipped tail and cold blue eyes which were inherited from her mother. She has a long tail, pale underbelly and a lean figure. Her claws are very long with incredibly sharp edges.
History:
- Spoiler:
- Icekit was born in the dead of winter, together with her sister, Rogue and her brother, Coldkit. Her father, Whiteshadow, wanted his kits to be raised under RiverClan but her mother, Hunter, kept Rogue behind because of her deformity. Having lived in RiverClan from young explains her extraordinary swimming skills and her lack of fear for water. Her birth itself was a curse, for her mother was a rogue. Being rejected from a young age, Icepaw had no friends nor company in RiverClan. Her ever protective brother, Coldfur, always stayed by her side, standing up for her and gradually, she started to gain confidence of herself. Even though she tried her very best to prove her own loyalties to her Clan, she knew deep down in her heart that there will never be a place for her in RiverClan.
Icepaw had a dream one day with a strange tom called Silverhawk. He claimed that she was one of his kin and he had died many many moons ago. Little did she know that he was from the Dark Forest . He recruited her when she just became an apprentice, thinking that she was worthy enough to be trained. She was trained under Silverhawk for a while before becoming Fallendust, a formidable Dark Forest warrior's apprentice. She was a newly-made warrior when she found out she had been tricked. Just as she left, Fallendust mysteriously told her a prophecy.
"You will lose everything you love, go through a time of darkness, loneliness and misery. But all those are worth it, to become the cat you were supposed to be."
Iceclaw was deeply puzzled by the prophecy but she ignored it, thinking that Fallendust was just trying to trick her again. It became true when her father died in a battle against ThunderClan and eventually, even her brother mysteriously disappeared, leaving her behind in a mournful and lonely world. Her foster mother, Frozenfur, drowned in a flood while her first apprentice, Dustpaw, died from greencough. She couldn't it any longer and hence, left the Clan at a mere age of 14 moons. She wandered far and wide across the snowy plains, hiding in the darkness as she spied on the other Clans. She learned some of their secrets and managed to use her new skills to survive by herself. She changed her name to Phantom then.
During a short stay at RiverClan, whom Brightstar welcomed her warmly, she was out wandering alone and discovered a cave. Curious, she went inside, not knowing that the place was dangerously fragile. When a gust of strong blew, the icicles that were formed at the ceiling broke off and fell onto Phantom. She died of massive blood loss.
Phantom, now a wandering spirit, eventually decided to go back to the Dark Forest, a place where no one judged her for her past but rather for her abilities. She proved herself to be a great member and is resourceful. In the Dark Forest, she was feared and highly regarded by many. She met another she-cat by the name of Aere and they became best friends. After many moons of training, she was promoted to be one of the legendary leaders of the Dark Forest. However, after the Battle of the Clans, she found forgiveness in her heart and called off the battle against the Clans. StarClan granted all the Dark Forest cats with a new life for them to repent.
More about Phantom's Family
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Whiteshadow (Father): A black tom with a distinctive white pelt and bright yellow eyes. He is a well-knowned RiverClan warrior for his battle skills. He is the youngest son of the RiverClan leader, Mistystar. He favours his son more than his daughter, which makes Phantom extremely jealous. He was killed in a battle against ThunderClan.
Hunter (Mother): A white she-cat with stunningly beautiful yet cold blue eyes. Hunter is a rogue and lives in the snowy mountains. She saves Whiteshadow's life one day from a harsh blizzard and from then on, the both of them developed a strong friendship. They eventually became mates.
Rogue (Sister): A dark gray she-cat with white-tipped ears and a permanently twisted paw. She lives with her mother as arranged by her father because of her deformity.
Coldfur (Brother): A blue-gray RiverClan tom with gray paws. He has one green and blue eye. He loves his sister, Phantom, very much and is always by her side until one day he mysteriously disappears and nobody has heard of him ever since.
Aere (Adopted Sister): A short-haired brown tabby Dark Forest she-cat. She trained with Phantom when they first joined Dark Forest and they have shared many memories and are very close.
Other Cats
- Spoiler:
- Dustpaw: Small gray tom with a white chin and paws. Has a scruffy coat and wide amber eyes. His father was a kittypet and thus, like Phantom, he was shunned by the Clan. Phantom's apprentice. He died from greencough.
Frozenfur: Long-furred pure white she-cat with gray eyes. She is a popular queen, known for her love for kits and her devotion in bringing them up. She was Phantom's foster mother but drowned in a flood.
Fallendust: A formidable black-furred Dark Forest tom icy blue eyes. His front fangs are very long and sharp. He actually fell in love with Phantom but she had no feelings for him. Until now, he still watches over her, sometimes whispering to her in her sleep.
Silverhawk: Silver-furred Dark Forest tom with a pale muzzle. He has a distinctive fluffy tail and has long striped hind legs which is useful for springing. He claims that Phantom is his kin but no one knows whether it is true or not.
Special thanks to the members of WCF whom I referred to their characters sheets
Last edited by Frost on June 24th 2013, 01:20; edited 97 times in total
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Re: Phantom
lololol this is why I shall take my time if I ever make a character sheet
I like the name Coldfur. I thought I heard it from the series too, though. Maybe it was my imagination. hmmm...
I like the descriptions in the family!
I like the name Coldfur. I thought I heard it from the series too, though. Maybe it was my imagination. hmmm...
I like the descriptions in the family!
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Re: Phantom
I don't remember a Coldfur in the books XD but never mind.
Thanks :3 it was totally random and then ta-dah, its there~
Thanks :3 it was totally random and then ta-dah, its there~
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Re: Phantom
Massive Update!!
Added:
• Favourite Warrior Characters
• Well-Known Kin
• Relationship Chart
• Key
Edited:
• Name
• Age
• Rank
• Weaknesses
• Special Traits
• Feral's Name
• Feral's Special Traits
• Ending Message
I took like 10 minutes or so editing and adding all these (especially the relationship chart and the overall coding of everything) so would you all kindly read through what I added/edited? Or maybe a like if you think its good? I think I missed out quite a few of you on my relationship chart so please tell me if you want to be added!
Added:
• Favourite Warrior Characters
• Well-Known Kin
• Relationship Chart
• Key
Edited:
• Name
• Age
• Rank
• Weaknesses
• Special Traits
• Feral's Name
• Feral's Special Traits
• Ending Message
I took like 10 minutes or so editing and adding all these (especially the relationship chart and the overall coding of everything) so would you all kindly read through what I added/edited? Or maybe a like if you think its good? I think I missed out quite a few of you on my relationship chart so please tell me if you want to be added!
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I like it! (And I liked it, if you get my meaning. )
I like how you made some parts underlined. No mistakes that I can spot! Very good character sheet!
I like how you made some parts underlined. No mistakes that I can spot! Very good character sheet!
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Re: Phantom
An admin double posting......
It's pretty good.
It's pretty good.
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Lunarlight, it's okay to double post as long as its 24 hour apart. And also, I am not an administrator on WCF :3
Edit: Did the site rules change? O.o please excuse my behavior. I'll take down my post later when I get on my computer
Edit: Did the site rules change? O.o please excuse my behavior. I'll take down my post later when I get on my computer
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Well, it doesnt say you can in the rules, so maybe yes, maybe no
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Omg Phantom this is great! I've always loved your pictures and everything is so neat and organized (I liked your post btw and the update is flawless!!)
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No, if the rules changed than Dragonclaw would have said so. You can double post as long as they're 24 hours apart. You won't find it in the site rules, but it's on the mod can for double posting
If I'm really editing here are the mistakes I found:
Put a comma after "...easily influenced by her emotions [comma] which is her greatest flaw."
I almost feel as though your flaws and special/good traits are unbalanced. Some more flaws or less elaboration on good traits would be helpful.
"...unusual azure eyes which were inherited from her mother."
For better presentation, put the "History:" title on its own line.
In history:
"Being rejected from [a] young [age]."
"Little did she know that he [was] from the Dark Forest."
In the prophecy, put a comma and combine the first two sentences.
In Feral's description, it should be [an] average tom.
That's all I got to, so I didn't read the rest. My post would be too long if I read it all Just some grammar mistakes and the other things I pointed out were opinion, so you can choose not to use those suggestions.
Close to overly descriptive, but well written. Good updates this time
And to those who leave small compliments without suggestions, I bet you don't even read people's profiles and you just post
If I'm really editing here are the mistakes I found:
Put a comma after "...easily influenced by her emotions [comma] which is her greatest flaw."
I almost feel as though your flaws and special/good traits are unbalanced. Some more flaws or less elaboration on good traits would be helpful.
"...unusual azure eyes which were inherited from her mother."
For better presentation, put the "History:" title on its own line.
In history:
"Being rejected from [a] young [age]."
"Little did she know that he [was] from the Dark Forest."
In the prophecy, put a comma and combine the first two sentences.
In Feral's description, it should be [an] average tom.
That's all I got to, so I didn't read the rest. My post would be too long if I read it all Just some grammar mistakes and the other things I pointed out were opinion, so you can choose not to use those suggestions.
Close to overly descriptive, but well written. Good updates this time
And to those who leave small compliments without suggestions, I bet you don't even read people's profiles and you just post
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Re: Phantom
This is so... sophisticated :3 Besides all the things CheeseStar mentioned, I can't find anything else that can be improved. It's awesome
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Thanks guys ^~^ I have no idea what else to add. I actually enjoy creating character sheets. So it would be fun to create more random characters xD Oh well, I won't because I already have quite a few in this topic :/
I edited my topic to your likings, Chez. You're the best at these error-spotting
I edited my topic to your likings, Chez. You're the best at these error-spotting
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Isn't Foxhunter what Foxleap wanted his warrior name to be when he was an apprentice? Haha
You find awesome pictures! They're all cool :O
Are you going to put a picture for Phantom?
You find awesome pictures! They're all cool :O
Are you going to put a picture for Phantom?
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(No it was Foxcatcher)
I like the history and the Reationship chart is cool since it referrs to what your cat thinks, not you as a person. :3
I like the history and the Reationship chart is cool since it referrs to what your cat thinks, not you as a person. :3
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Awesome updates Phan! I should update my character sheet too, shouldn't I? ^^ Haha I'll find time to work it out maybe tomorrow or Monday. I really like the pictures you find for your characters
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I read the rest of it today
More grammar stuff x)
" She saves Whiteshadow's live one day from a harsh blizzard and from then on, the both of them develops a strong friendship."
This sentence is really weird. I'm guessing the weird tenses were just typos due to s being next to d, so that's just a small thing.
In Fallendust's little paragraph: "..with [a] white chin.."
For Silverhawk, it should be "silver-furred tom" instead of "silvery-furred".
Very deep history and well-developed characters
I'm practicing my editing for our short story unit in school. Am I too picky?
More grammar stuff x)
" She saves Whiteshadow's live one day from a harsh blizzard and from then on, the both of them develops a strong friendship."
This sentence is really weird. I'm guessing the weird tenses were just typos due to s being next to d, so that's just a small thing.
In Fallendust's little paragraph: "..with [a] white chin.."
For Silverhawk, it should be "silver-furred tom" instead of "silvery-furred".
Very deep history and well-developed characters
I'm practicing my editing for our short story unit in school. Am I too picky?
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Well I finally had time to edit the topic to Chez's liking :3
Well, I daresay you would get full marks for your editing. I always get a "just pass" for my editing skills
Well, I daresay you would get full marks for your editing. I always get a "just pass" for my editing skills
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Re: Phantom
Just wondering, why is your topic have 7.4 likes???
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That's because someone disliked it once :3
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Dun Dun Dun...
If you ever find out, I wouldn't want to be them...
Thanks. I've already liked it.
If you ever find out, I wouldn't want to be them...
Thanks. I've already liked it.
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Wow that's really nice XD
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I'm the only one as "family"?
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What do you mean Snowlily? Thanks Doveshine.
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Yay name change. I was just noticing how confusing it was that it was listed that Aere and I are your adopted sisters and yet on the relationships chart Aere is listed as an acquaintance.
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The explanation is right above the Relationship Chart spoiler.
*This is based on my overall experience with members of the site through PMs, roleplays etc.
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Well my relationship chart is based on whatever goes on in WCF... Aere and I aren't exactly very close but I know her better than before. So the relationship chart shows how close we are Lily!! :DD I haven't forgotten you!!
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