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Brightstar's Untitled Fanfic
I know I still have my autobiography story to write but this idea was so interesting I couldn't resist writing a bit. It would be much appreciated if anyone could contribute some title ideas!
- Prologue: I am Gray:
- I was the regular one, the plain, ordinary of the ordinary one. In other stories, the point of view is always told in that of the hero. The character that has the great destiny and power. But not me.
My name was Gray. Graykit, Graypaw, Graysky. Named for the pale gray colour of my slightly up-tilted eyes. So plain, compared to my littermates. Pearl. Pearlkit, Pearlpaw, Pearldust. Scorch. Scorchkit, Scorchpaw, Scorchstorm.
Pearl was a beautiful, cream-white furred she-cat. Her eyes were gorgeous, the colour of turquoise sea waves. Her figure was slim and gracefully shaped, with her triangular head and dainty paws. She could run faster than the fastest dog, swim better an otter. Her very presence was calming, and her tongue was very persuasive indeed. Almost unusually so.
Scorch was a fighter. He was hot-tempered and sharp-tongued, fierce and temperamental. If Pearl was water, he was fire. His dark amber eyes reflected his nature, and whenever he glared at you, you'd think the colour of those irises were like hot embers, volatile enough to explode into an inferno at any moment. His pelt was black like mine, but even darker. His claws, fully extended, were three-and-a-half inches long. When he fought, he was a bolt of lightning, strong and swift. Deadly.
I was their shadow in their path to greatness. I was medium-sized, lean and wiry. My build was for jumping and climbing, my mind wired for quick reflexes and infinite patience. It made me a natural hunter, and it was I who brought back prey in the harshest of leaf-bares when others couldn't. Did I get noticed along with my littermates? No. Perhaps it was my fault. Our father, Phoenixglare, once commented on my 'lack of presence.' Perhaps it was because of my inclination to usually speaking only when necessary.
Cats usually forgot about me. Next to my sister and my brother, I was easily forgotten. My ordinary appearance, personality, name. Even "Graysky" held no particular meaning. My eyes simply had reminded Amberstar of a cloudy morning sky.
I'd always thought my eyes were more silver than gray after inspecting my reflection in the lake. Wouldn't 'Silver' be such a better name? Silversky. Ah, that name still rings like the finest tune.
But it was my destiny to be ordinary with my extraordinary littermates. Fire and ice? Ha.
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Hmmm.... this is interesting so far. I'll have to do a warriors story myself sometime. I was planning on doing it soon. I need a plot myself. Write more soon!
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This is really cool Brighty, I like it! Its very interesting, the first chapter gets you hooked onto the story really! It seems like a kind of... depressing character too I'm interested to see where this fanfic will go so please write more! ^.^ Great job so far Brighty!
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Pearldust is a lovely name. Not bad for a start, keep writing!
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Pearldust and Scorchstorm are wonderful names! You are so descriptive! It's great so far! Keep up the good work!
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Thanks for the support guys! :3 Chapter 1 will most likely come out today or tomorrow, and I'll get some major writing done on Monday since I have the day off from school.
Any ideas for a title, just based on the prologue?
Any ideas for a title, just based on the prologue?
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I liked the prologue No typos and great descriptions. Pearldust reminds me of Hazeldust ;_;
For titles, how about:
Fire, Ice and Shadow
Silver Secrets
Okay I am pretty bad at titles ><
For titles, how about:
Fire, Ice and Shadow
Silver Secrets
Okay I am pretty bad at titles ><
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THE 50 SHADES OF GRAY!!!!! Lol, just kidding, just kidding XD You should call it the Book of the Gray or Gray Ice? I don't know? Gray Fire? Lol I'm okay at names but this one is hard. Keep up the work!!!!
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Maybe finding a title will be easier after a couple more chapters. Cause then there's a clearer plot.
Hey Chez, maybe you could make a cover for this. After you're done with all your other requests of course xD
DS, that book is fragging creepy e_e I hardly read past three chapters when I was like, okay, nevermind, never reading this again. But would Between Shades of Gray be a better title?
Hey Chez, maybe you could make a cover for this. After you're done with all your other requests of course xD
DS, that book is fragging creepy e_e I hardly read past three chapters when I was like, okay, nevermind, never reading this again. But would Between Shades of Gray be a better title?
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IKR! That book has a lot of... um, older stuff in it. My sis is 17 and she can't read it. I just read my mom's bit sneakily Anyway, yeah, but it probably would sound like 50 Shades of Gray. Maybe like... Between Gray Ice or Between Ice and Fire?
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I'm going to go ahead with the 'Between Shades of Gray' idea for now, because it kind of fits the plot I'm thinking about.
I made a cover (could be temporary, could be permanent), and I hope you don't mind I used that photo Phanny. I just thought it was perfect because Gray is black-furred, and she spoke of 'looking at her reflection.'
I made a cover (could be temporary, could be permanent), and I hope you don't mind I used that photo Phanny. I just thought it was perfect because Gray is black-furred, and she spoke of 'looking at her reflection.'
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Lol Bright, you stole my pic xD but I think the name seems pretty okay.
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Yeah I said in that post up there. Hope you don't mind.
I think the title fits the story, but if I come across a better one I'll change it. It just depends on how the plotline goes as I write. Usually I don't plan my stories before I write, so I never know what'll happen.
D'you guys think it'd be a good idea after every chapter I could ask everyone to contribute on how they want the story to go on from there? It would be fun I think, to let everyone participate a little and it would also help me keep continuing the fanfic.
I think the title fits the story, but if I come across a better one I'll change it. It just depends on how the plotline goes as I write. Usually I don't plan my stories before I write, so I never know what'll happen.
D'you guys think it'd be a good idea after every chapter I could ask everyone to contribute on how they want the story to go on from there? It would be fun I think, to let everyone participate a little and it would also help me keep continuing the fanfic.
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I don't mind since I stole it from another person HAHAHA.
Well, I have no idea how I would continue the story. Maybe something tragic happens. Would it be a happy or a sad ending?
Well, I have no idea how I would continue the story. Maybe something tragic happens. Would it be a happy or a sad ending?
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Every book I read has a happy ending. Maybe this time it could have something not super bad but kinda bad happen? I don't know. It's your choice since you're the authour.
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