A crowy meeting

by Bramblesky January 26th 2013, 10:34

Hey!!! this is me!!!!!

Name- Crowshadow
Gender- Male
Age- 6 years
Description-
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Personality- Friendly, jumpy, and is hilarious and adventurous
Mate-...PM me if intrested
Kits- N/A
History- Crowkit was not a normal kit, he always went off in search of adventure. Usually got caught by a passing patrol. Flowerkit, his sister, never came with him, she was made deputy when she was a senior warrior, Flowerheart took Dashclaw and him on patrol, Dashclaw had screeched in anger and ran away. A few days later we searched for him and found him,dead, infront of the ancient oak. Flowerheart died in a battle with a fox and he grieved her. Then his oldest brother died as a med. cat, from old age.

Name- Dark Forest Crowshadow
Gender- Male
Age- 7 years
Description- A crowy meeting Downlo10

Personality- Mean, evil, dark-minded,and arrogant]Mate- Doesn't care[/color]
Mate- Doesn't care
Kits- Whatever
History- Was trained in Dark Forest, Blackfrost, had killed him now Starclan won't take him in and he turned evil and has an apprentice named, Blackpaw.

by **Caraway** January 26th 2013, 10:50

I really like the idea of a desperate Dark Forest persona Very Happy

Your history is a bit confusing. I'd suggest rephrasing a few sentences since they sound strange. Be careful with overusing commas Wink

Also, the personality colour is a bit blinding xD

It's a good start and i think it'd be cool if it elaborated more on your parents, he effects this had on Crowshadow's development, etc.