The rise of the shadows

Story:Blackpaw my cat I facing her biggest challenge ever,The dark forest.She isn't the only one facing them There's her brother's Spottedpaw and Flamepaw,her sister's Shadowpaw and Freezepaw.Then there's her freinds Clawpaw,Riverpaw,Cedarpaw,and Rainpaw.Along with The three clans Nightclan[Blackpaw,Spottedpaw,Flamepaw,Shadowpaw,Freezepaw],Swiftclan[Clawpaw]Stormclan[Riverpaw,Cedarpaw],And Hailclan[Rainpaw].But there is one Thing.........a Prophecy Black,Claw,Rain,and river will destory evil and darkness.

Nightclan
Leader Strikestar-Light brown tabby tom
Deputy Stormtalon-very dark gray almost black tom with green eyes
Apprentice,Freezepaw
Medince cat Rosemoon-smokey gray she-cat
Apprentice,Flamepaw
Warriors
Firedreamer-dark ginger she-cat with saphire blue eyes
Apprentice,Spottedpaw
Hawkfang-black tabby tom
Apprentice,Blackpaw
Sandheart-Prue white she-cat with one blind eye
Apprentice,Shadowpaw
Apprentices
Blackpaw-Black and white she-cat with green eyes
Spottedpaw-flecked gray tom with pale blue eyes
Flamepaw-flaming ginger tom with bright green eyes
Shadowpaw-black and white she-cat with amber eyes
Freezepaw-pale gray she-cat
Queens
Snowriver-pale gray she-cat[Mother of Strikestar's kits:Longkit[Black tom],Loudkit[Light brown tom],and Featherkit[dark ginger she-cat]
Elders
Flightheart-dark gray tabby

Swiftclan
Leader Rainstar-light gray she-cat
Apprentice,Dawnpaw
Deputy Flashheart-dark brown tabby tom
Medicne cat Shadowheart-Black and white she-cat
Apprentice,Clawpaw
warriors
Flightbreeze-Red and cream she-cat with green eyes
Darkfeather-jet-black she-cat
Apprentice,Gingerpaw
Swiftfur-white tom
Spottedpelt-calico she-cat with green eyes
Apprentice,Strikerpaw
Apprentices
Dawnpaw-motteld tortoiseshell she-cat
Strikerpaw-Black she-cat
Clawpaw-gray tabby tom with green eyes
Queens
Raingazer-dark gray she-cat[Mother of Graykit[dark gray tom],Streamkit[Blue-gray she-cat]And Pinekit[Dark gray she-cat]
Elders
Maplejumper-pale gray tabby
Bramblemask-brown tabby tom

Stormclan
Leader Dawnstar-pale golden tom
Deputy Wolfheart-dark gray she-cat
Medince cat Echoflight-pale tabby tom with holly green eyes
Apprentice,Marshpaw
Warriors
Featherfur-gray tabby she-cat
Apprentice,Riverpaw
Snowtail-White tom with green eyes
Apprentice,Inkpaw
Dovestream-Dark gray she-cat
Apprentice,Cedarpaw
Apprentices
Riverpaw-Dark gray tom
Cedarpaw-dark silver tabby she-cat with green eyes
Marshpaw-moltted dark brown tom
Inkpaw-Dark brown she-cat
Queens
Mudflight-brown she-cat[Mother of Volekit[pale gray tom]Icekit[prue white she-cat]and Mistkit[dark gray tabby tom]
Fernmask-Dark brown tabby she-cat[Mother of Grasskit[Dark brown tom]and Larchkit[Brown tabby she-cat]
Elders
Dappleheart-spotted gray tabby tom

Hailclan
Leader Rabbitstar-white she-cat
Apprentice,Brightpaw
Deputy Fallheart-redish-brown tom
Apprentice,Rainpaw
Medince cat Goldshadow-pale golden she-cat
Apprentice,Nightpaw
Warriors
Tawnywhisker-tawny colored tom
Apprentice,Thornpaw
Graceheart-Pale gray tabby she-cat with Icy blue eyes
Apprentince,Fuzzypaw
Rockgazer-dark gray and white tom with green eyes
Apprentice,Tanglepaw
Apprentices
Brightpaw-golden she-cat
Rainpaw-pale gray tom
Nightpaw-jet-black she-cat
Thornpaw-golden-brown tabby tom with green eyes
Fuzzypaw-blue-gray tabby she-cat
Tanglepaw-Golden brown tabby tom
Queens
Skyheart-gray she-cat[Mother of Hawkkit[brown tabby tom] And Russetkit[moltted dark ginger she-cat]
Elder
Windflame-dark silver tom

wow, actually, this is amazing! I really feel like Erin Hunter wrote it, it feels, so Warriors-ish ( that was said wrong ) please continue it!

Thank you Lunarlight.I'm with done nightclan.

This plot sounds interesing, and the character names are unique. Can't wait for the story

OMG!!! Cool! I know who could be the leader of the DF... It's one f my RP characters. Her name is Moonsplash. She's a tiny pale gray she-cat with icey blue eyes. She murdered half of Thunderclan (or any of the clans that are in this story, if you make her) because she was always made fun of (her size). She murdered all of her siblings, and I'm not saying how... O.O" They were scary...

I LOVE THE IDEA!!!

Err.. the spacing makes it hard to read..

Yeah. I'll still read it, though.

The other clans are finally done!

The prophecy seems rather obvious, not really vague at all... Well at any rate, it seems interesting. Keep writings

I can barely read the first paragraph. Maybe you should type it out on Microsoft Word first, because it'll correct the mistakes.

Uhhh could you differentiate between the different Clans more? I can't tell which cats are StormClan and which are the other Clan, or if they're warriors/queens/apprentices. And like Tyson said, maybe you should type it out on Word.
Sorry, I think I'm slightly OCD because I just hate it when people don't put spaces after their punctuation marks O.o"

The proluge is up!

That's a pretty short prologue. o.O And it's really hard to read because of the lack of spaces and quotation marks...

This is...um really hard to read and hard to understand....Try editing it on word, because it will correct your mistakes!

The descriptions are pretty okay; there are just a few typos like apostrophes instead of colons. I would do what Viper suggested and write it on Microsoft Word. Also, start a new line whenever someone says something It's a common mistake but it helps, so people can understand who's saying what.