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Sunbeam
Name: Sunbeam
Gender: Tom
Age: 30 moons.
Description: A large golden tom with lighter yellow patches and black paws. He has unusually long claws and amber eyes.
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Strengths: He has powerful muscles that help him be a strong swimmer. He is extremely skilled at tactics and strategy, and can think up great battle plans.
Weaknesses: Because if his large frame, Sunbeam always seems to brush against reeds or snap a twig. He often misses prey, making him a not-so-great hunter.
Family:Cloud, River (Rain), Shadow, Sunflower
History: As a kit named Fire, foxes raided his family's den, killing his mother, father, and littermate. He wandered alone for a few days, until a RiverClan warrior found him and took him to RiverClan. There he became an apprentice and trained in the way of the warrior.
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Other Info
(Credit to Lightningstorm!)
Favorite time of year: New-leaf
Least-favorite time of year: Leaf-bare
Favorite food: Water Vole
Least favorite food: Blackbird
Favorite thing taught during training: Fighting and battle tactics.
Least favorite thing taught during training: Races
Phsyical abilities: Swiimming, fighting, pouncing, strength and accuracy
Strengths: Fighting, Swimming, Debating, Strategy
Weaknesses: Running, Climbing, Stealth.
Problem solving skills: Looks at all the options and then picks the best possible one.
Communication Skills: Tries to convey things clearly and quickly.
Leadership skills: Good
Teamwork skills: Tries to see from another perspective, cooperative.
Learning skills: Quick
Organization skills: Careful and meticulous.
Investigation skills: Persistent and very meticulous.
To a lack of food: Encourages and hunts for his friends and clanmates.
To a lack of sleep: Easily angered, tries to stay awake.
To someone finding your darkest secret: Make then promise to keep it, feel nervous.
To a begging friend: Helps as much as he can.
To a begging stranger: Careful but might help (depending on the situation).
To the death of a loved one: Sad, moody, hollow
To the death of a stranger: Curious, a little sorry.
To a starving cat: Hunts for them
To a sick cat: Take them to a medicine cat.
To be in trouble: Looking for a way out, apologetic, and embarrassed.
To be lied to: Steady and persistent, trying to find the truth and the reason why you were lied to.
To see someone bullied: Break it up, speak to the bully/bullies.
To be trapped: Calm, looks for a way out, comforts friends/clanmates.
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Gender: Tom
Age: 30 moons.
Description: A large golden tom with lighter yellow patches and black paws. He has unusually long claws and amber eyes.
Pictures:
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Strengths: He has powerful muscles that help him be a strong swimmer. He is extremely skilled at tactics and strategy, and can think up great battle plans.
Weaknesses: Because if his large frame, Sunbeam always seems to brush against reeds or snap a twig. He often misses prey, making him a not-so-great hunter.
Family:Cloud, River (Rain), Shadow, Sunflower
History: As a kit named Fire, foxes raided his family's den, killing his mother, father, and littermate. He wandered alone for a few days, until a RiverClan warrior found him and took him to RiverClan. There he became an apprentice and trained in the way of the warrior.
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Other Info
(Credit to Lightningstorm!)
Favorite time of year: New-leaf
Least-favorite time of year: Leaf-bare
Favorite food: Water Vole
Least favorite food: Blackbird
Favorite thing taught during training: Fighting and battle tactics.
Least favorite thing taught during training: Races
Phsyical abilities: Swiimming, fighting, pouncing, strength and accuracy
Strengths: Fighting, Swimming, Debating, Strategy
Weaknesses: Running, Climbing, Stealth.
Problem solving skills: Looks at all the options and then picks the best possible one.
Communication Skills: Tries to convey things clearly and quickly.
Leadership skills: Good
Teamwork skills: Tries to see from another perspective, cooperative.
Learning skills: Quick
Organization skills: Careful and meticulous.
Investigation skills: Persistent and very meticulous.
To a lack of food: Encourages and hunts for his friends and clanmates.
To a lack of sleep: Easily angered, tries to stay awake.
To someone finding your darkest secret: Make then promise to keep it, feel nervous.
To a begging friend: Helps as much as he can.
To a begging stranger: Careful but might help (depending on the situation).
To the death of a loved one: Sad, moody, hollow
To the death of a stranger: Curious, a little sorry.
To a starving cat: Hunts for them
To a sick cat: Take them to a medicine cat.
To be in trouble: Looking for a way out, apologetic, and embarrassed.
To be lied to: Steady and persistent, trying to find the truth and the reason why you were lied to.
To see someone bullied: Break it up, speak to the bully/bullies.
To be trapped: Calm, looks for a way out, comforts friends/clanmates.
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- Relationship Chart:
- Birdstar | * * * * * * * * * * | 10, Mate
Streamstar | * * * * * * | 6, Good Friend
Flamepaw | * * * * * | 5, friend
Snowstar | * * * * * | 5, Friend
Thuderclaw | * * *| 3, Acquaintance
Tell me if you want to be added!
- Key:
- 1=Enemy, 2=Stranger, 3=Acquaintance, 4=Clanmate, 5=Friend, 6=Good friend, 7=Best friend, 8=Distant Family, 9=Close Family, 10=Mate
Last edited by Sunbeam on August 6th 2013, 00:45; edited 39 times in total
Sunbeam- RiverClan Senior Warrior
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Re: Sunbeam
Nice, I like the description. Will you add a history?
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Re: Sunbeam
Sure.
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Re: Sunbeam
Posts have to be more than 5 words, Ara (can I call you that?).
I like it!!! Add a history soon!!!
I like it!!! Add a history soon!!!
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Re: Sunbeam
Sorry. I didn't know that.
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Re: Sunbeam
222aragorn wrote:Sorry. I didn't know that.
Hello! Welcome to WCF!
I highly recommend you take a good look at our Site Rules
http://www.warriorcatsforum.com/t46-site-rules-v21#17549?tid=ca348d48ba34a16206bf3401a83347bf
Thanks and have a great time!
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Re: Sunbeam
Thanks! And I just read the rules.
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Re: Sunbeam
I updated it! 9/6/12
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Re: Sunbeam
Mmh. Interesting... One thing I would recommend is widening your vocabulary by using a variety of words and phrases. For example, in the Appearance you typed, "powerful shoulders." Then, in the special traits, you wrote, "His powerful muscles help him be a powerful swimmer." Too much repitition may lead to the reader losing interest. Also, I strongly suggest more details in your history/biography, as it is a bit dull and vague with only two sentences.
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Re: Sunbeam
Done! And I updated it! 9/16
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Re: Sunbeam
Maybe your custom rank could be "Strategist". It fits your character's personality
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Re: Sunbeam
Tactitian and strategist mean the same thing right? But I'm change it anyway.
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Re: Sunbeam
Strategist sounds nicer
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Re: Sunbeam
I like it, better word choice there. Your avatar is ginger though
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Re: Sunbeam
I know. There were no real golden cat pics that were good quality.
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Re: Sunbeam
You a decent amount of interesting facts and quirks into your bio, considering its length your history sounds a lot like Spiderman's; he's raised by other people and wants to find out more about his parents and past when he grows up. Your description matches Darkfire's avatar pretty well too
You should add pictures if you can't find any, I'd be glad to help, and Brightstar is also a really good picture finder
You should add pictures if you can't find any, I'd be glad to help, and Brightstar is also a really good picture finder
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Re: Sunbeam
Thanks, Cheese. I am horrible at finding pictures. I would appreciate it if you found me some pictures. I haven't read spiderman, but it's cool that I have the same history. I am going to edit my description to match my avatar.
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Re: Sunbeam
I could help you too, in fact I might edit this post later and put in pictures.
Just a few things I noticed:
In the history there are some capitalization errors, so it should actually look like this:
Sunbeam was found by a RiverClan warrior as a kit and grew up there. His parents are supposed to be rogues. He really wants to find out their identity. For a brief period he was captured by Twolegs, so he has a deep mistrust of them.
And... Did Streamfur agree to be your former mentor? If not, I think you should check with her. It's not a big thing, but I consider it... just not polite to put someone in your character sheet without asking
Just a few things I noticed:
In the history there are some capitalization errors, so it should actually look like this:
Sunbeam was found by a RiverClan warrior as a kit and grew up there. His parents are supposed to be rogues. He really wants to find out their identity. For a brief period he was captured by Twolegs, so he has a deep mistrust of them.
And... Did Streamfur agree to be your former mentor? If not, I think you should check with her. It's not a big thing, but I consider it... just not polite to put someone in your character sheet without asking
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Re: Sunbeam
Your character sounds really well put together and unique, Sunbeam! Good job!
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Re: Sunbeam
@ Maplestream: Streamfur did agree to be my former mentor. I would really like it if you found some pictures for me.
@Stareye: Thanks!
@Stareye: Thanks!
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Re: Sunbeam
here are some:
i tried to find some without watermarks on them the second last one is a bit big, but you can easily crop it to just the head
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i tried to find some without watermarks on them the second last one is a bit big, but you can easily crop it to just the head
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Re: Sunbeam
Thanks! The first two aren't. Working...
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Re: Sunbeam
Just zoom out to 75% to see the whole picture
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Re: Sunbeam
Massive Update!
Added:
•Second Roleplay Character
•UpdatedPersonality
Added:
•Second Roleplay Character
•UpdatedPersonality
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Re: Sunbeam
Update!
Added:
•Relantionship chart
•Key
Updated:
•Personality
•History
Added:
•Relantionship chart
•Key
Updated:
•Personality
•History
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