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Post by Sunbeam July 25th 2012, 21:04

Name: Sunbeam
Gender: Tom
Age: 30 moons.
Description: A large golden tom with lighter yellow patches and black paws. He has unusually long claws and amber eyes.
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Personality: Sunbeam is very brave and intelligent. He worries about future problems, but he doesn't let it overshadow his life. He can normally tell whether you are lying. He comforts and encourages his friends and clanmates.
Strengths: He has powerful muscles that help him be a strong swimmer. He is extremely skilled at tactics and strategy, and can think up great battle plans.
Weaknesses: Because if his large frame, Sunbeam always seems to brush against reeds or snap a twig. He often misses prey, making him a not-so-great hunter.
Family:Cloud, River (Rain), Shadow, Sunflower
History: As a kit named Fire, foxes raided his family's den, killing his mother, father, and littermate. He wandered alone for a few days, until a RiverClan warrior found him and took him to RiverClan. There he became an apprentice and trained in the way of the warrior.
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(Credit to Lightningstorm!)
Favorite time of year: New-leaf
Least-favorite time of year: Leaf-bare
Favorite food: Water Vole
Least favorite food: Blackbird
Favorite thing taught during training: Fighting and battle tactics.
Least favorite thing taught during training: Races
Phsyical abilities: Swiimming, fighting, pouncing, strength and accuracy
Strengths: Fighting, Swimming, Debating, Strategy
Weaknesses: Running, Climbing, Stealth.
Problem solving skills: Looks at all the options and then picks the best possible one.
Communication Skills: Tries to convey things clearly and quickly.
Leadership skills: Good
Teamwork skills: Tries to see from another perspective, cooperative.
Learning skills: Quick
Organization skills: Careful and meticulous.
Investigation skills: Persistent and very meticulous.
To a lack of food: Encourages and hunts for his friends and clanmates.
To a lack of sleep: Easily angered, tries to stay awake.
To someone finding your darkest secret: Make then promise to keep it, feel nervous.
To a begging friend: Helps as much as he can.
To a begging stranger: Careful but might help (depending on the situation).
To the death of a loved one: Sad, moody, hollow
To the death of a stranger: Curious, a little sorry.
To a starving cat: Hunts for them
To a sick cat: Take them to a medicine cat.
To be in trouble: Looking for a way out, apologetic, and embarrassed.
To be lied to: Steady and persistent, trying to find the truth and the reason why you were lied to.
To see someone bullied: Break it up, speak to the bully/bullies.
To be trapped: Calm, looks for a way out, comforts friends/clanmates.
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Last edited by Sunbeam on August 6th 2013, 00:45; edited 39 times in total
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Post by Noxe July 25th 2012, 21:16

Nice, I like the description. Will you add a history?
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Post by Sunbeam July 25th 2012, 23:09

Sure.
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Post by Redstar July 25th 2012, 23:13

Posts have to be more than 5 words, Ara (can I call you that?).

I like it!!! Add a history soon!!! Wink
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Post by Sunbeam July 25th 2012, 23:37

Sorry. I didn't know that.
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Post by Dragonclaw July 25th 2012, 23:47

222aragorn wrote:Sorry. I didn't know that.

Hello! Welcome to WCF!

I highly recommend you take a good look at our Site Rules Wink
http://www.warriorcatsforum.com/t46-site-rules-v21#17549?tid=ca348d48ba34a16206bf3401a83347bf

Thanks and have a great time!
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Post by Sunbeam July 26th 2012, 00:02

Thanks! And I just read the rules.
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Post by Sunbeam September 6th 2012, 19:21

I updated it! 9/6/12
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Post by Noxe September 7th 2012, 16:16

Mmh. Interesting... One thing I would recommend is widening your vocabulary by using a variety of words and phrases. For example, in the Appearance you typed, "powerful shoulders." Then, in the special traits, you wrote, "His powerful muscles help him be a powerful swimmer." Too much repitition may lead to the reader losing interest. Also, I strongly suggest more details in your history/biography, as it is a bit dull and vague with only two sentences.
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Post by Sunbeam September 16th 2012, 04:28

Done! And I updated it! 9/16
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Post by Frost September 16th 2012, 04:35

Maybe your custom rank could be "Strategist". It fits your character's personality Wink
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Post by Sunbeam September 16th 2012, 04:38

Tactitian and strategist mean the same thing right? But I'm change it anyway.
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Post by Frost September 16th 2012, 04:39

Strategist sounds nicer Razz
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Post by Noxe September 16th 2012, 07:51

I like it, better word choice there. Your avatar is ginger though Razz
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Post by Sunbeam September 16th 2012, 08:54

I know. There were no real golden cat pics that were good quality.
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Post by Caraway September 16th 2012, 11:02

You a decent amount of interesting facts and quirks into your bio, considering its length Wink your history sounds a lot like Spiderman's; he's raised by other people and wants to find out more about his parents and past when he grows up. Your description matches Darkfire's avatar pretty well too Bite

You should add pictures Smile if you can't find any, I'd be glad to help, and Brightstar is also a really good picture finder Razz
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Post by Sunbeam September 21st 2012, 09:11

Thanks, Cheese. I am horrible at finding pictures. I would appreciate it if you found me some pictures. I haven't read spiderman, but it's cool that I have the same history. I am going to edit my description to match my avatar.
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Post by Noxe September 21st 2012, 16:32

I could help you too, in fact I might edit this post later and put in pictures.
Just a few things I noticed:
In the history there are some capitalization errors, so it should actually look like this:
Sunbeam was found by a RiverClan warrior as a kit and grew up there. His parents are supposed to be rogues. He really wants to find out their identity. For a brief period he was captured by Twolegs, so he has a deep mistrust of them.

And... Did Streamfur agree to be your former mentor? If not, I think you should check with her. It's not a big thing, but I consider it... just not polite to put someone in your character sheet without asking Wink
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Post by Stareye September 21st 2012, 18:05

Your character sounds really well put together and unique, Sunbeam! Good job!
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Post by Sunbeam September 21st 2012, 20:06

@ Maplestream: Streamfur did agree to be my former mentor. I would really like it if you found some pictures for me.

@Stareye: Thanks!
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Post by Caraway September 21st 2012, 21:11

here are some:
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i tried to find some without watermarks on them Sweat the second last one is a bit big, but you can easily crop it to just the head Smile
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Post by Sunbeam September 21st 2012, 21:23

Thanks! The first two aren't. Working...
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Post by Legendflower September 22nd 2012, 14:07

Just zoom out to 75% to see the whole picture Razz
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Post by Sunbeam November 8th 2012, 19:49

Massive Update!

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Post by Sunbeam November 23rd 2012, 03:17

Update!
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•Relantionship chart
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