Jagged

Hello All,
You might have known me before...I was Birchkit, daughter of Frostwhisper/Pandora. I drowned and was reincarnated as Jagged, a Masquerader.

Name- Jagged
Age- 9 moons
Gender- Male
Clan- Masqueraders
Family- Pandora (mother) Tigerkit (sister) Gingerlion (aunt)
Mate- None
Rank- Apprentice
Life Story- ~POOF reincarnated~ (P.S. Pandora said I could god-mod) The cool rain matted the kit's sand-colored fur to his body. She curled up, closer to the willow. He closed his eyes. ~next day~ The rain had ceased over night, and the kit got up early to hunt. He came back to his make-shift nest with two sparrows and a fat mouse. Deer-lengths away, he sensed another cat. And sure enough, there was a white bushy-tailed cat sitting in her nest. The cat turned. Her blue eyes gleamed. Instinctively the kit growled. The white cat did nothing and walked towards him. "Hello, son." ~I almost said I am your mother lol~
The kit's jaw dropped. "What?" He tilted his head. "I'm Pandora of the Masqueraders. You are-WERE- Birchkit of RiverClan." She said. He shook his head. "What do you mean?" Pandora closed her eyes. "You died." The kit blinked. "I'm reincarnated?!" He said with shock. Pandora nodded. He flopped down on the ground. Pandora scowled. "No. Get your beautiful fur OFF that mud." He shot up. Mother's orders. "Come back to the Masqueraders." she said.
Later, the kit walked nervously back to the camp with his...mother. The leader greeted them kindly. "You will be named...Jagged." (short XD)

I like it, Birch. Oh wait, JAGGED. I like it Jagged

It's a good start.  Remember, you have to be accepted into the Masqueraders first. Have you sent a joining request to the group yet?

And by the way, your avatar is the same as Sagedapple's. You might want to change it.
http://www.warriorcatsforum.com/u37

I just accepted her request  Welcome to the Masquerade Jagged!

I've read through your character sheet and Jagged sounds so cute xD However, concerning age, 23 moons is much too old to be an apprentice (we call this rank a Novice in the Masqueraders). You should be between 6-16 moons if you're still training  
Also, I get a bit confused which cat is speaking in your history. Usually, with dialogue, a new line is started when a different cat speaks. It'll help with the organization of it.

So far so good. Add some appearance an personality thingies. I wanna know more about this alleged Jagged

Yay more members hehe

Welcome to the Masqueraders, we'll start our roleplays shortly (most probably when the ORPG comes).

Great name! However if you're in Masqueraders, you are entitled to have both a rogue and a warrior name. Since you're a novice/apprentice, are you going to be Birchpaw?

MWAHAHA Masqueraders ftw  Welcome welcome! I think you still need a Masqueraders badge btw. Try to add a bit more detail to your character sheet and organize the history. It's good so far though. Also I'd love to help with your training (I'm a Sentinel, see Masquerader's info).
Great to have you with us. See you around!

Thank you guys so much! I'll change the age and picture ^^

Well I suggest you to at least include a "Appearance" and a "Personality" in your character sheet so that we could have a better idea of what your character is like.

So, you're a Novice? Have you thought of anyone in particular for a mentor? If I'm not wrong, each novice gets two mentors, a sentinel and a shadower.