Briarpaw :3

Name: Briarpaw

Age: 7 Moons

Clan: ThunderClan

Rank: Apprentice

Mentor: Leopardwing

Personality: A lovable she-cat that is hyper and fun-loving

Apperance: Briarpaw is an abnormally small apprentice. She has a brown pelt and blue eyes. Her whiskers are curly and short. Also a very long tail!

Family: Birchpetal; Mother Jaytalon; Father

Strength: Climbing,Tracking

Weakness: Balance

Favorite Time Of Year: New-Leaf

Favorite Fresh-Kill: Rabbit, Shrew, and Squirrel

Favorite Color: PINK

History: Briarkit was born in ThunderClan but was the only one in her litter. She really like to play with other kits and soon forgot she didn't have any siblings. Her mother had died from greencough while she was still very young. Her father was hit b a monster on the Thunderpath. She had watched a few apprentice ceremonies and always dreamed about being one. When her apprentice ceremony came she was happy, but when she found out Leopardwing would be her mentor she was excited!

More Coming Soon! Maybe Even Pictures!
Sorry If this Is hard to follow with all the color

Awh she sounds like a cute little kitty

There's a lot of potential to elaborate here. You should add more to her personality, like what her friends think of her, how she reacts to things, etc. In appearance, you can add details like whiskers, claws, tail length and others.

The colour you used for ThunderClan is my favourite colour, actually: pastel yellow. However, it's really hard to see and I had to highlight it, which I wouldn't be able to do on a mobile device too well. Lastly, you should experiment with different sentence starters and conjunctions in your history. For example:

Briarkit was born in ThunderClan. She was the only one in her litter, however, she made friends with the other kits and loved playing with them. From kithood, she always dreamed about being an apprentice. When she found out that Leopardwing was her mentor, she was overly excited!

Just my suggestions, you can revise them otherwise if you wish I like the prefix Briarpaw and can't wait for your warrior name

I feel so loved <3


Anyways, I would suggest that you don't make it sound too "eager" or overly hyper. Also, I would improvise on the description of your charrie, like what Lump of Cheese said. You may also want to add more to it, such as favourite colours and favourite fresh-kill. The history that you added was brief, but didn't describe much about your parents, or maybe the kits she would play with. Hm...I would also suggest a weaknesses and strengths section so that you don't sound like a "Perfect Warrior". Other than those, Briarpaw seems to be that charatcer that everyone loves

Your character sheet is very Unique! ( LUV DA COLORS BY DA WAY! )

Leopardwing wrote:I feel so loved <3


Anyways, I would suggest that you don't make it sound too "eager" or overly hyper. Also, I would improvise on the description of your charrie, like what Lump of Cheese said. You may also want to add more to it, such as favourite colours and favourite fresh-kill. The history that you added was brief, but didn't describe much about your parents, or maybe the kits she would play with. Hm...I would also suggest a weaknesses and strengths section so that you don't sound like a "Perfect Warrior". Other than those, Briarpaw seems to be that charatcer that everyone loves

Haha I feel so unloved. </3 bu or the most part I think these are some good suggestions.

Silverwing wrote:

Leopardwing wrote:I feel so loved <3


Anyways, I would suggest that you don't make it sound too "eager" or overly hyper. Also, I would improvise on the description of your charrie, like what Lump of Cheese said. You may also want to add more to it, such as favourite colours and favourite fresh-kill. The history that you added was brief, but didn't describe much about your parents, or maybe the kits she would play with. Hm...I would also suggest a weaknesses and strengths section so that you don't sound like a "Perfect Warrior". Other than those, Briarpaw seems to be that charatcer that everyone loves

Haha I feel so unloved. </3 bu or the most part I think these are some good suggestions.

You ok? O.o
Anyways, I like how it is multicoloured, but the history is kinda small. xD

Um is who okay?

You...You said you felt unloved...

Thank you for the suggestions. I'm sorry about the brief History I was having trouble thinking. But Thanks again ~Briarpaw

I wasn't being serious. O.o and okay briarpaw