Iceclaw

Cat Name: Iceclaw.
Gender: Female.
Age: 20 moons.
Favorite Warriors Characters: Hard to favorite...
Appearance: a small grey tabby with greenish eyes, kinda sleek.
Personality: Serious, sometimes jolly, can act cold to cats she dont like.
Special Traits: Very fast, a good dodger.
Weaknesses: Gets reckless immediately when a cat she trusts is in danger, making her get in danger too.
Family: If they dont need to be in forum: Father: Sol, a strong rogue tom.
Mother: Flurry, a beautiful kittypet she.
Siblings: Sparrow, her younger brother,
Violet, Her older sister
and Snowy, her second older sister. If they have to be on forum: nobody yet.
History/Origins: One day a female named Flurry gave birth to four kits, Violet, Snowy, Ice and Sparrow. These kits got along very well and played alot everyday, but one day, there wasn't room for them anymore in the little house, and they were planned to be adopted away. First one to get a new home was Snowy, after that Violet got a home, then Sparrow, But Ice was never choosed by anyone. Still the twolegs didnt want to raise another cat, so Ice was abandoned, the young cat had no idea what happened, all her siblings had suddenly vanished, and then she was locked outside and was never let in again. After a while the young she-cat thought: "Nobody wants me, im all alone..." After that she started hunting on her own, catching rats and mice around in the Big city, after a while she wandered far away, to the Eternal forest, which she made her new home, she also gave herself a new name, Iceclaw.

I hope this story is acceptable.

We ought to be best friends!! I joined this site as Iceclaw too but changed my username when I became the Dark Forest leader. The age should be in moons instead of years, like the Warriors series. Hard to earn trust isn't a special trait, more of a personality. Family doesn't have to be part of the forum.

Is Iceclaw part of a Clan?

Iceclaw, I do like it, but you should space it out and such for more organization, or even better color-code it Trust me, it makes it really easier. And also on here instead of years, we do moons. A 'moon' is a month, if you didn't know. 12 months is more of an apprentice age, so you may want around.......... a mid-20 moon cat? Also, special traits are more of....... 'fast, swift, swimmer, runner, dodger' kind of thing, 'hard to earn trust' would be personality, like Phantom stated. Other than that, it's a really good start! Also, if you go on the main strip of WCF sections at the top of every WCF page, look at the groups section. There, you can select your clan you hope to be accepted by the leader. You may also want to add, I don't know, maybe decoration? Here, these are really good examples from some others:

http://www.warriorcatsforum.com/t273-brightstar-banner-thing-added
- Brightstar

http://www.warriorcatsforum.com/t2341-dawnstorm-up-to-date
- Dawnstorm

http://www.warriorcatsforum.com/t1909-windystorm
- Windystorm

http://www.warriorcatsforum.com/t1259-snowlily
- Snowlily

Theres A LOT of other long and pretty ones, but I couldn't post everyone's sheet on here lol. Check those out if you want to get a better idea. If you don't know how to add spoilers, colors, underline, bold, whatever, you can ask for it in the help section or in this topic, since everyone will probably view your sheet.

That's pretty good for a start. Though I agree with Dawnstorm and Phantom. Moons are months, like Dawnstorm said. That's a really good hisory.

It's very developed for the first draft Everyone else mostly starts with a few and branches off later but you covered almost everything in the first shot

I would rephrase your weakness. It doesn't seem to make much sense, but I think you were going for something along the lines of "Gets reckless immediately when she finds out someone she trusts is in danger."
I think you should start a new line for every family member, just to make it more appealing to read. Large chunks of writing look like a textbook xD
Also, add some pictures I know Brightstar can find really nice ones ^-^

I know im messy and dang it, i wrote it in years...i forgot that i should use months, well, thanks for correcting me.
I'll change it a little.
Im not in a clan yet.
Brightstar is good at getting pictures, but that doesnt say i am...I freakingly fear copyright...

and yeah, in my characters eyes, trusting everybody is a weakness, make a character, be a character. (Sorry for being so weird...)