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Ironclaw
Name:Ironclaw
Gender: Tom
Age: 40 moons
Appearance: A medium sized tabby with brown fur and dark brown and black stripes. He has piercing amber eyes.
Personality: Suspicious and untrustworthy, he is very hard to trick. He is mean and bad tempered, making him unpopular, but he doesn't care. Moons of abuse has left him twisted and evil, and he hungers for revenge...
Strengths: He is amazing at stealth and extremely agile and fast. What he doesn't have in strength he usually can make up in speed.
Weaknesses: He is not strong, and does not like water at all.
History: He was born a kittypet, but was ferocious to his twolegs, who wanted to have him "treated". At the vet's office, Ironclaw escaped and ran into the streets. He was bullied and often mistreated, by cats and twolegs alike, until one day a twoleg scooped him up and took him to a poor section of town. There the twoleg put metal claws on him. He wanted to turn him to fight in catfights. But one day the twoleg opened the door, and Ironclaw jumped out of the twolegs arms and escaped. He then joined the clans.
Family: Ironclaw remebers none of his family, as twolegs took him away from his mother when he was just a kit.
Gender: Tom
Age: 40 moons
Appearance: A medium sized tabby with brown fur and dark brown and black stripes. He has piercing amber eyes.
Personality: Suspicious and untrustworthy, he is very hard to trick. He is mean and bad tempered, making him unpopular, but he doesn't care. Moons of abuse has left him twisted and evil, and he hungers for revenge...
Strengths: He is amazing at stealth and extremely agile and fast. What he doesn't have in strength he usually can make up in speed.
Weaknesses: He is not strong, and does not like water at all.
History: He was born a kittypet, but was ferocious to his twolegs, who wanted to have him "treated". At the vet's office, Ironclaw escaped and ran into the streets. He was bullied and often mistreated, by cats and twolegs alike, until one day a twoleg scooped him up and took him to a poor section of town. There the twoleg put metal claws on him. He wanted to turn him to fight in catfights. But one day the twoleg opened the door, and Ironclaw jumped out of the twolegs arms and escaped. He then joined the clans.
Family: Ironclaw remebers none of his family, as twolegs took him away from his mother when he was just a kit.
Last edited by Sunbeam on August 4th 2013, 03:03; edited 4 times in total
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Re: Ironclaw
That colour for "My Roleplay characters: Sunbeam and Ironclaw" is kinda hard to read xD
Very interesting character you've got here! Maybe you should add his parents under Family.
Very interesting character you've got here! Maybe you should add his parents under Family.
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Re: Ironclaw
I know.
He doesn't know who his parents are. His twolegs bought him from the family who owned his family.
He doesn't know who his parents are. His twolegs bought him from the family who owned his family.
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Re: Ironclaw
I must say I do like this character....... great detail, and no errors it appears. Wonderful!
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It's got good detail for a secondary character
In the history, you should read it over because I noticed that you repeated a lot of words such as: "At the vet's office, Ironclaw escaped from the vet's office, and ran into the streets." You also used "the Twoleg" as a sentence starter many times in a row.
The colour is nice
In the history, you should read it over because I noticed that you repeated a lot of words such as: "At the vet's office, Ironclaw escaped from the vet's office, and ran into the streets." You also used "the Twoleg" as a sentence starter many times in a row.
The colour is nice
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Re: Ironclaw
@Dawny: Thanks!
@Cheesestar: Thanks, I'm editing it right now!
@Cheesestar: Thanks, I'm editing it right now!
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Re: Ironclaw
Ironclaw...Such a cool name!
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Re: Ironclaw
Doveshine, please don't spam. I appreciate that you like my name, but maybe you should also post whether you like the charrie sheet or not.
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Re: Ironclaw
Sorry for spamming I like it, but I think you should make Sunbeam related to Ironclaw. That would make more sense since they're both your characters.
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I would do that, except all of Sunbeam's siblinhs were killed. I might change, it, though.
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Re: Ironclaw
UPDATED.
Tell me what you think!
Tell me what you think!
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Re: Ironclaw
Wonderful sheet!
I don't see any errors and don't have any advice other than add more!
Very nice name, by the way. I like it!
I don't see any errors and don't have any advice other than add more!
Very nice name, by the way. I like it!
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Re: Ironclaw
Beautiful sheet Sunny! Ironclaw has very sad story just lie mine. Love the color, Personality, and History!
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Re: Ironclaw
Cool, Sunbeam! (: You should add some pictures to his profile. Is this your character, or a 'Other Character?'
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This is my secondary Character. I'm horrible at finding pictures.
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Cool! I like it Sunbeam!
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