The Deciever

We have never had a panther on this site! Welcome! I'm lunarlight

A little more description here and there would do a lot of good. ;-) Funny that you're creating a panther in craete your cats.

Welcome to WCF Thin Air:

I am the temporary admin until Dragonclaw returns from his short absence. I would like to remind you to check the Site Rules v2.2, as it states that only users who have obtained special permission may officially be animals other than a cat.

To see the Site Rules, click here.

Thanks,
Staff

I'm sorry, I only just checked the rules. Could I be a panther? Please?

Hey, Thin Air! Welcome to WCF! I'm Icestar, leader of MoonClan and I really hope that you like it here. If you have any questions feel free to ask

Thin Air wrote:I'm sorry, I only just checked the rules. Could I be a panther? Please?

You should prove that you deserve this special privilege first as there are quite a number of old members who too would like to have their characters to not be cats. For the time being, your character will have to be a cat. Thanks.

Like the previous posts have said, you can't be a panther right now. But don't worry about it too much You can, however, edit your post; the edit button is at the top right corner of your topic post. I like your description, though I would strongly duggest more detail on generally everything. Add a history, your character sounds interesting (:
I see you can swim well, perhaps you'd like to join RiverClan?

Phantom wrote:

Thin Air wrote:I'm sorry, I only just checked the rules. Could I be a panther? Please?

You should prove that you deserve this special privilege first as there are quite a number of old members who too would like to have their characters to not be cats. For the time being, your character will have to be a cat. Thanks.

Which members want to be another animal? O.o I know I want to be another animal. *CoughcoughLeopardcough*

Okay. Thanks anyway. I'll change to a cat.

I like the new description! Since you like swimming, you should join Riverclan! *wink wink*

Psh, Riverclan doesn't need anymore members!

Windclan needs more active members, and I think you'd fit in perfectly Thin Air!
We'd love to have you in Windclan!

P.S: I love your name! So orginal!

Everyone goes into salesman mode when a new member joins

I like it It's nice and simple and the descriptions aren't over the top. Thin Air is a cool name; it's like thin ice, only it uses a different element.
You should add a history and some information on your family members. I wouldn't change much about what you already have.

Lol. Sunbeam has an advantage because I know him IRL. I'm going to add a history soon!
And I got the name Thin Air from the expression "vanish into thin air".

You could add more stuff to your character sheet. Maybe refer to mine for example :3

I'm revising it now. :3 I just typed a huge amount and my kindle automatically reloaded the page and I lost it all! >:O

I know how you feel. I was posting on my kindle and then I lost everything D: Anyway, you can join any clan but WindClan would be more than happy to have you!!! Haha get it like Thin Air, WindClan

Finally! I added the history!

Short and sweet history It's got the basics, but only the basics, so I would just suggest rephrasing some of the sentences.
"As a kit of six moons, foxes broke into her den. She saw her parents and two littermates killed. She managed to escape, and taught herself how to hunt."
A bit too rushed. You should add how she escaped and possibly how her family died, since it was quite improbable that she was the only one who escaped.
"Because of her claws she often had to steal prey, so she lived near the clans. Because she was an expert on stealth, they didn't see her."
Try different sentence starters. A conjunction word should not be used at the beginning of a sentence.
I liked how you had support for why she had to live near the Clans and such

Wonderful Like CheeseStar said, some rewording can be done, like the two "because" sentences. So I guess you're a loner then? RiverClan would be happy to have you. Oh and I'd suggest changing the topic title because you're a cat now. Unless "The Panther" is figurative. If it is you could add something in the decription like "She is known as the Panther by some because of her appearance." Overall, it's very nice

(@Sunbeam please try to post more detailed information; that you want to be a leopard isn't really related to this topic. And I already mentioned recruiting to RiverClan in my earlier post just a friendly reminder.)

I edited it and modernized the history. Please tell me what you think!

It's short and simple, but it is a very good beginning! If you keep working on it, It will turn out very well!

It's pretty cool.I like it.