I'l lRate You Fan-Made Warriors!

Just post a character sheet of your fan made warrior, maybe a picture? I will Rate out of 10 and give suggestions on what I think needs added or not!

Sure! My picture is my avatar.

Description: pure-black she-cat with golden eyes
Clan: FireClan
Personality: kind, but sometimes bossy. Deadly fighter. Loves to help other warriors' apprentices on battle training
Fav. food: blackbird
Mother: loner (Frost)
Father: deceased (Falling Rain)
Brother: loner (Bracken)
Rank: leader

I like Darkstar's signature. Hey, Darkstar, did you make that? Do you know where to make banners? I want to my own.

Yeah me too! [I want to make one for me and Lotusflower to share]

Lol. I want to enter mine! Is this a competition?

Fernleaf wrote:Lol. I want to enter mine! Is this a competition?

Nope, just a rating board!

Darkstar wrote:Sure! My picture is my avatar.

Description: pure-black she-cat with golden eyes
Clan: FireClan
Personality: kind, but sometimes bossy. Deadly fighter. Loves to help other warriors' apprentices on battle training
Fav. food: blackbird
Mother: loner (Frost)
Father: deceased (Falling Rain)
Brother: loner (Bracken)
Rank: leader

6/10. Not much to rate. I would appreciate a backstory and something like that.

ooh i want to make one like Darkstar's. i'll try to take FeatherPelt's "advice". lol.

my picture will be the avatar too then.

name: CheeseStar
Clan: AwesomeClan
Description: fluffy cheese-coloured tabby she-cat with amber eyes.
Mother: Ginger (kittypet)
Father: Cheddar (kittypet)
History: came from a twoleg nest, originally a kittypet. was abandoned, until she found a place to stay: behind a restaurant dumpster. began to get fat off leftovers. knows twoleg food. later, was kicked out and thrown onto the thunderpath near forest. joined ShadowClan, until she was made into a leader. end of story!
Personality: dim? clueless? cheesey? blunt and honest?
Siblings: (hehe... this one's a secret)....

CheeseStar wrote:ooh i want to make one like Darkstar's. i'll try to take FeatherPelt's "advice". lol.

my picture will be the avatar too then.

name: CheeseStar
Clan: AwesomeClan
Description: fluffy cheese-coloured tabby she-cat with amber eyes.
Mother: Ginger (kittypet)
Father: Cheddar (kittypet)
History: came from a twoleg nest, originally a kittypet. was abandoned, until she found a place to stay: behind a restaurant dumpster. began to get fat off leftovers. knows twoleg food. later, was kicked out and thrown onto the thunderpath near forest. joined ShadowClan, until she was made into a leader. end of story!
Personality: dim? clueless? cheesey? blunt and honest?
Siblings: (hehe... this one's a secret)....

Pretty nice. 9/10, I just dont giving out 10's because to me there is no PERFECT cat. I cant find alot to change, it looks good, it flows. Nice Job! :3:

name: Brokenheart
Clan: Bladeclan (a clan that I made up)
Description: Black and reddish fur
Mother: Honey (loner)
Father: Cedarclaw (deputy of Bladeclan)
History: Born from a loner, his father knew Brokenkit would get judged. Along with his sister Daisykit, They traveled back to the clan. Luckily, Cornstar accepted them. When he was an appentice, he fell in love with Clan-mate Darkpaw. As a warrior he got paired with Blossomcloud. Blossomcloud said she wanted Goldenheart, Darkfeather's mate. To make them jealous, they were acting like they completely in love. There only one problem, Blossomcloud is having kits! I will finish more of the story later.
Personality: SAD SAD SAD
Siblings: Daisypetal.

<3Swiftnose<3 wrote:name: Brokenheart
Clan: Bladeclan (a clan that I made up)
Description: Black and reddish fur
Mother: Honey (loner)
Father: Cedarclaw (deputy of Bladeclan)
History: Born from a loner, his father knew Brokenkit would get judged. Along with his sister Daisykit, They traveled back to the clan. Luckily, Cornstar accepted them. When he was an appentice, he fell in love with Clan-mate Darkpaw. As a warrior he got paired with Blossomcloud. Blossomcloud said she wanted Goldenheart, Darkfeather's mate. To make them jealous, they were acting like they completely in love. There only one problem, Blossomcloud is having kits! I will finish more of the story later.
Personality: SAD SAD SAD
Siblings: Daisypetal.

Interesting warriors name Kinda like it though. 7/10. The name could be better, but overall it is really good! :33

Name:Honeystar
Also known as: Honeytongue, Madhu, (Jatan) Madhurasna [(Nurturing) Honeytongue]
My picture [can I use more than one?] is my avatar, plus these two:


Honeytongue as a kit


Honeystar and Lotusflower. Mates forever, cuddle close together.

Description: Golden-wheat pelt. Brown tail, ears, paws, mask (face). Stunningly intense almond-shaped blue-green (aqua/ sea green) eyes. Hind legs slightly longer than front legs. Muscular/athletic and Oriental-type body. Medium built in size. Weight- A "brick wrapped in satin". Despite being a WindClan cat, he also enjoys swimming and tree climbing [skills he learned back in Lakshmi Valley].

Breed and Gender: Tonkinese Tom

Personality: Sweet, kind, sympathetic/compassionate, nurturing, understanding, artistic, intelligent, loyal, strong and brave.

Clan/ Rank: WindClan Leader

Mate: Lotusflower

Kits: Maple(heart), Moon(splash), Wolf(song), Honey(flower), Crane(flight), Peach(fur)

Fav. Food: Squirrels, Birds (pheasant, jungle fowl [wild chicken]), Fish [especially salmon], and Mice. Also snacks on honey, fruit, and bugs (crickets/grasshoppers/ beetles)

Mother: (Devi) Tigresspool

Father: (Raksha) Liondance

Sisters: Kali [adopted- a black leopard/panther], Petalstorm

Brother: Sunblaze

Secret skills/ Hidden talents (things he rarely reveals to other clan cats): Knowledgeable in the lives and languages of other animals [even Twolegs- but he's unable to talk to them], beekeeping, painting, dancing/performing/singing, writing/reading, playing the Sitar, masters at weilding weapons/ martial arts [back in Lakshmi Valley].

History [before joining the Clans]:

Born in a far away land called Lakshmi Valley [a mystical place in South-east Asia], Honeytongue lived a happy life among his family and friends [which included non-cat animals] in both the jungle and The Forgotton City [an ancient abondoned Twoleg-place]. When Twolegs began destroying the valley, Honeytongue was one of several cats [and other animals] sent to save it. They had to find a way to convince the Twoleg 'High Leader' to protect their homeland. During that time, Honeytongue met Lotusmoon. Lotusmoon was a Companion [a special order of Royal cat Body-guards] to the High Leader's daughter. Through her help, Lakshmi Valley was saved.

Honeytongue and Lotusmoon fell in love with each other, but her duty as a Companion meant they couldn't be together. Feeling sorry for them, the High Leader's Daughter granted Honeytongue as a second Companion, to take over Lotusmoon's place. At the ceremony (of Honeytongue becoming a Companion, and being Lotusmoon's mate), an assassination-attempt was made on the High Leader's Daughter! Even though she was now free from her bond as a Companion, Lotusmoon saved her friend's life, at the cost of her own. With her last words, she told Honeytongue that in another life, they would meet again to continue their love. With Lotusmoon gone, and his grief too strong, Honeytongue returned to Lakshmi Valley. One moon later, he recieved a vision from Stormstaff. The spirit of Tigresspool's mentor told Honeytongue that the time to mourn for Lotusmoon was over, and his destiny waited for him in another place based on a prophecy [StarClan?].

Leaving his home [for as he said himself- "Without Padma, not even paradise can offer me peace."], he set off as a Loner, traveling across the world until he came upon the Warrior Cat Clans.

wow! i got 9/10. o.O that's awesome for me! i like you second picture, honeystar. i think honeystar's back-story is quite interesting.

Thanks Cheesestar.

Honeystar wrote:Name:Honeystar
Also known as: Honeytongue, Madhu, (Jatan) Madhurasna [(Nurturing) Honeytongue]
My picture [can I use more than one?] is my avatar, plus these two:


Honeytongue as a kit


Honeystar and Lotusflower. Mates forever, cuddle close together.

Description: Golden-wheat pelt. Brown tail, ears, paws, mask (face). Stunningly intense almond-shaped blue-green (aqua/ sea green) eyes. Hind legs slightly longer than front legs. Muscular/athletic and Oriental-type body. Medium built in size. Weight- A "brick wrapped in satin". Despite being a WindClan cat, he also enjoys swimming and tree climbing [skills he learned back in Lakshmi Valley].

Breed and Gender: Tonkinese Tom

Personality: Sweet, kind, sympathetic/compassionate, nurturing, understanding, artistic, intelligent, loyal, strong and brave.

Clan/ Rank: WindClan Leader

Mate: Lotusflower

Kits: Maple(heart), Moon(splash), Wolf(song), Honey(flower), Crane(flight), Peach(fur)

Fav. Food: Squirrels, Birds (pheasant, jungle fowl [wild chicken]), Fish [especially salmon], and Mice. Also snacks on honey, fruit, and bugs (crickets/grasshoppers/ beetles)

Mother: (Devi) Tigresspool

Father: (Raksha) Liondance

Sisters: Kali [adopted- a black leopard/panther], Petalstorm

Brother: Sunblaze

Secret skills/ Hidden talents (things he rarely reveals to other clan cats): Knowledgeable in the lives and languages of other animals [even Twolegs- but he's unable to talk to them], beekeeping, painting, dancing/performing/singing, writing/reading, playing the Sitar, masters at weilding weapons/ martial arts [back in Lakshmi Valley].

History [before joining the Clans]:

Born in a far away land called Lakshmi Valley [a mystical place in South-east Asia], Honeytongue lived a happy life among his family and friends [which included non-cat animals] in both the jungle and The Forgotton City [an ancient abondoned Twoleg-place]. When Twolegs began destroying the valley, Honeytongue was one of several cats [and other animals] sent to save it. They had to find a way to convince the Twoleg 'High Leader' to protect their homeland. During that time, Honeytongue met Lotusmoon. Lotusmoon was a Companion [a special order of Royal cat Body-guards] to the High Leader's daughter. Through her help, Lakshmi Valley was saved.

Honeytongue and Lotusmoon fell in love with each other, but her duty as a Companion meant they couldn't be together. Feeling sorry for them, the High Leader's Daughter granted Honeytongue as a second Companion, to take over Lotusmoon's place. At the ceremony (of Honeytongue becoming a Companion, and being Lotusmoon's mate), an assassination-attempt was made on the High Leader's Daughter! Even though she was now free from her bond as a Companion, Lotusmoon saved her friend's life, at the cost of her own. With her last words, she told Honeytongue that in another life, they would meet again to continue their love. With Lotusmoon gone, and his grief too strong, Honeytongue returned to Lakshmi Valley. One moon later, he recieved a vision from Stormstaff. The spirit of Tigresspool's mentor told Honeytongue that the time to mourn for Lotusmoon was over, and his destiny waited for him in another place based on a prophecy [StarClan?].

Leaving his home [for as he said himself- "Without Padma, not even paradise can offer me peace."], he set off as a Loner, traveling across the world until he came upon the Warrior Cat Clans.

9/10- Once again, this is AMAZING but there is no perfect cat. Not really many flaws that I can see. Great work! :33