Lunarpaw

That's a nice start! I like the personality.

It's a pretty good start There's a lot of detail in the sections you have filled out. I like the personality, too, because it aounds sort of like me in real life You should add her history to make Lunarpaw a more 3D character.
The family section is also where a lot of people elaborate. For ideas, there are always other cats' templates to sample I think the order of things should be switched around a bit, with appearance and personality dbeing above family.

And also, hello I'm CheeseStar. Please check out the Site Rule if you haven't, because it'd be pretty bad if you broke one of them accidentally as a first impression.

That's a really good start Lunarpaw! Keep up the good work!

Hello. Im Snowlily the Shadowclan deputy. To go off of what Cheesestar said you really should read over the rules of the site as there is no cursing allowed in the forums. You should also change the last sentence of your personality.

Lunarpaw wrote:Personality: Shy around cats she doesn't know, but lively around friends. Kind-of stupid and smart. Nice, happy most of the time. You do not want to be around her when she is ******.

This will need a bit of editing to be compliant with the rules but otherwise this is a good start.

thanks all of you!

Heyo! Welcome to the forum! I am afraid we got off on the wrong foot. Perhaps I can be your mentor?

welcome lunarpaw! i hope you've liked skyclan so far! anyway, whose your mentor? ( if you don't have one then i hope hazelstar picks me! )

Nice! Good start, perhaps you can add more detail, though. But it looks awesome!!!

angel, you're gonna become a queen soon, remember?